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Have you written your own book?
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Sun Apr 08, 2007 5:11 am

more! more!!!! thats really great!! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Sun Apr 08, 2007 1:39 pm

You like it that much! Question- if you saw that book in the book store and read the back, that was the preview( the one i wrote before) would you buy it?

i tell you wat, when i have finished ill send it to all of you. ok:study:
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 3:35 am

Very Happy Smile bounce oh boy! id buy it, make sure its long though, they seem long when you write it then look tiny when your done, are you planning on being an author??? Very Happy Smile bounce
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 3:59 am

Well, i could, but i wanna own my own business. If this book gets published you and all your friends ahve to buy it ok.( but i doubt it will.) oh and i have just finished the 5th chapter.study
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 4:19 am

i rite alot of poetry and when one of my close friends died in an ATV accident i wrote this poem..., maybe you guys could help me improve it some.

Life it seems, will fade away
Drifting further every day
Getting lost within myself
Nothing matters no one else
I have lost the will to live
Simply nothing more to give
There is nothing more for me
Need the end to set me free

Things are not what they used to be
Missing one inside of me
Deathly lost, this can't be real
Cannot stand this hell I feel
Emptiness is filing me
To the point of agony
Growing darkness taking dawn
I was me, but now she's gone
No one but me can save myself, but it to late
Now I can't think, think why I should even try
Yesterday seems as though it never existed
And now i say....goodbye...

is it good?

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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 2:07 pm

I think it is good, but it sounds a bit emo.But maybe that is the point, well anyway.

Keep living!flower
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 2:22 pm

Hey guys, heres another sneak peak.Oh and are any of you good drawers, if you are send me some drawings of elves please.






Knock, knock, ď Dho dis ditĒ Markus yelled with his mouth full. ďIt is I Sathon, prince of Lithanon, and I have found the woman I love!Ē He barged through the door with the most mirthful look on his hansom face. ďIím in love brother! Love! I have never felt like this before, I feel like I have been reborn!Ē ďSo, whoís the lucky lady?Ē Markus said bluntly, still eyeing his food. ďHer name is Alexa. Isnít it the most beautiful name you have ever heard?Ē ďFor sure,Ē Markus replied sarcastically. ďTomorrow I must see her. I will shower her with gifts, and ask her to come back with me here. What am I doing, I have to go pack, and choose the gifts!Ē and without warning prince Sathon ran out of the room with a bounce in his step. ďHe interrupted my dinner for that, how selfish.Ē Markus thought as gorged on his roast beef.

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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Mon Apr 09, 2007 9:21 pm

I would totally bye that book dude.

D elightful
E ntertaining
A t last
T rivial
H oray
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 11, 2007 2:42 am

Shocked wow, now i feel bad cause there are all these good authors and poets and stuff. sometimes i write beginnings of stories but i lose interest in them or just don't have the patience to finish them or anything. or i can't think of anything more. usually they are really bad.


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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 11, 2007 2:43 am

I'm glad you guys like it, do you have any ideas i can use, or maybe some constructive critisism( did i spell that right?)

Oh and if your a good drawer pleeeease send me a drawing of an elf, I will give you full credit for it( if it is good enough and we use it.)

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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 11, 2007 2:47 am

sry, i can't draw anything really, let alone elves Crying or Very sad
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 12:13 am

hey hows the book coming 2cool?
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 9:36 am

Its going great, heres another preview( if anyone steals my story im going to kill you!)*Ah hem* back to the book.



ďSomeoneís at the door for you.Ē Quickly rushing past her friend while tidying up her hair, Alexandria flung the door open. But to her disappointment it wasnít Sathon, but instead a rather young man by elf standards. ďGood morning madam, are you Alexandria?Ē ďErr, yes I am, how can I help you?Ē ďI have some packages and a message from prince Sathon.Ē Alexandria was filled with glee. The youngling passed her the packages and then recited the message,

ďAlexandria my love, I am missing you every moment of the day, I cannot wait until you move in to the palace. I am having a masquerade ball in three days time and I hope you use my gifts to their full potential, Love Sathon.Ē
When the man finished he began to blush, ďWhat is the matter?Ē Alexandria asked curiously, ďWell umm, the prince wanted me to give youÖ one more thing.Ē ďOk, so what is it th- whoa!Ē before she could finish the boy quickly kissed her on the cheek then ran away.
Is it good?
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 6:05 pm

aww that is so sweet i love it and hey i ve gotten a little but farther in my book its not a fantasy but heres what i got so far


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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 6:07 pm

Societyís Unwanted Children
By Phoenix (sorry i put my real name on there)
Part I
Beginning Scene: Joeís Bar Jack and friend Tyler enter, right as Alezandro Mone is getting ready to sing.
Jack: I just donít think thereís another girl out there for me man. At least not one that could handle all my anger. (Chuckles to himself)
Peter: You have to be the oddest person I have ever net. I mean you could just go out and get a girl and have fun with her.
Jack: No I couldnít do that because I just donít find a woman who sells herself all that appealing.
Peter: Well that girl up there has some anger! (Shouting because the music is so loud)
Jack: (staring to pay attention to a girl singing about how sheíll do what she wants to no matter what anyone says and that if someone gets in her way sheíll take them down one at a time) Who is that?
Joe/bartender: That thereís Alezandro Mone but everyone calls her Ale. That is the most gorgeous girl in town, also has more anger than the devil himself.
Jack: I want her. (Says this with the determined voice) and I plan on having her.
Peter: What are you talking about? Didnít you just say youíd probably never want a woman again?
Jack: That was before I saw her. And I plan on having her,
Joe/bartender: (while refilling their drinks) I wouldnít count on that man. Whatís a Phoenix?
Jack: itís the most powerful, most elegant, and beautiful bird in the word. It has a heart of fire and it when it dies its reborn through its ashes. And why not? Does she not date or something?
Joe: Yea she dates as long as her foster brother approves but lately sheís not been listening to her brother as much. Thereís been some problems there I donít know.
Jack: Whoís her brother? I might know him.
Joe: Bobby Mone. Esther Mone adopted them.
Jack: Donít know him do you Tyler?
Peter: Yea heís a real tough guy streetwise and all. Letís just say heís not the kind of guy you want to mess with.
Jack: Oh well. Yu canít stop a guy on a mission.
Peter: Hey man she might not even for you. Did you think about that? (Laughing)
Jack: Do I look like the kind of a guy that would get turned down?
Peter: No you look like the kind of guy whoís really over-confident. Hey man here she comes.
Jack: Iíll catch you later. (Walks over to Ale) Hi, Iím Jack
Ale: (Glances at him without a second thought) And?
Jack: Whatís your name?
Ale: Ale. Is that all I can help you with Jack? (Says this bluntly)
Jack: Maybe. Can I get you a drink?
Ale: No you may not. Iím 17. Bet you donít want to talk to me now, now then do ya?
Jack: No thatís cool. How about a soda?
Ale: Ok.
Jack: So youíre a singer huh?
Ale: (pouring a flask in her drink then takes a pill) not really itís just a spare time kind of thing
Jack: (laughs while looking at her cup) Thatís cool. I have a spare time kind of thing to.
Ale: Oh yea what?
Jack: I fight
Ale: Like professionally?
Jack: You could say that I used to just start fights on the street but now I own a place where people can just fight for the fun of it, itís kind of like that movie fight club you know. In fact thatís probably where I got the idea from.
Ale: And is anyone allowed at this so called club?
Jack: Well you could come check it out with me if you want to.
Ale: I donít know maybe I shouldnít.
Jack: Ok well I guess I gotta go (and gets up to walk away)
Ale: WaitÖ youíll let me in free?
Jack: You sure your brother wonít mind?
Ale: Do I honestly look like the kind of girl who listens to everything her brother says? Iím in. If itís for free.
Jack: In that case letís go.
Ale: Great
Scene change: The car pulls up to the club and Jack and Ale get out.
Jack: Welcome to my sanctuary!
Ale: It looks great. Letís go.
Jack: Thereís something you should know if you go in there you have to fight.
Ale: Ok (says surprisingly)
Jack: Alright (laughing)
Ale: (enters the club) This place is great Jack.
Jack: Thanks I like it alright. (Sees Peter across the room) I want you to meet a friend of mine. Hey Peter come over here will ya
Peter: Hey He-y (exaggerated) youíre that singer you were really good. Iím Peter.
Ale: Itís nice to meet you Iím Ale. Jack says youíre the co-founder of this place.
Peter: Yea that would be me
Peter: So hey are you going to fight?
Ale: I hear you donít have a choice.
Peter: Well it is a rule. Alright its time to go
Jack: Aww youíll do great. (Stands in center of the room and starts the meeting) Welcome everyone to the main spot tonight. As you all know if itís youíre first night here you have to fight, so whoís first.
Ale: Iíll go.
Jack: (smiling) Alright any takers? No? Alright then how about me?
Ale: Ok. Letís go (this said confidently)
Jack: (while taking off his shirt and shoes and Ale did the same she kept on her bra) You scared?
Ale: Do I look scared?
(The fight began. He hit She hit. They both shed blood. The fight lasted 2 hours. And then at the endÖ
Ale: I hate to embarrass you but I have to do this. (And she hit him and he fell Ale won the fight.
Everyone: (screaming) OH MY GOD (over and over)She Beat Jack!!!!! Oh my God!!!
Ale: No hard feelings come here
Jack: Come Here. (Leads her over to the corner and starts kissing her)
Ale: Iíll take that as a no. (And kisses back)
Scene change: Bobby at the Joeís Bar
Bobby: Hey Joe whereís Ale?
Joe: She left with some guy a few hours ago she gave me the address.
Bobby: You let her go off with some guy give me that address. Who was it?
Joe: Jack Williams he owns that place where you can go fight for the fun of it. Thatís where he took her actually.
Bobby: Iím going to kill 3 people tonight. You, him, and her. Man I have a busy night so excuse me.
Setting Change: Back at the spot/club Bobby has just entered the building and is greeted by Peter.
Peter: hi Iím Peter welcome youíre new right so you have to fight so letís find you a partner.
Bobby: No Iím just hear to fi (sees Ale and Jack making out) fight Jack Williams.
Robbie: Alright. Yo Jack you just got a challenger.
Jack: Ok Iíll be right there. You going to watch me.
Ale: Of cou- Oh my God!
Jack: What?
Ale: Itís my brother Bobby. The one who just challenged you. Heíll try and kill you. I mean who do you think taught me to fight.
Jack: Iíll watch myself donít worry. I never lose two fights in a row.
Ale: just be careful ok?
Jack: Ok
Ale: (walking over to bobby) Bobby what are you doing donít do this.
Bobby: Excuse me as soon as I kill him Iím taking you home and then weíll talk.
Ale: Bobby! (The fight began. They shook hands and started the fight.)
Bobby: I better not ever see you touch my sister again man. You got that? (Says while walking around Jack)


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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 6:07 pm

Jack: Iím sorry no I donít remind me again. (Tauntingly)
Bobby: (slams in the head) I said you better not touch my sister again. You got it now.
Jack: Sorry no I forgot again. (Bobby slams his head in again. Blood flying everywhere)
Jack: Alright I got it. Shit I lost it again. (Bobby slams him in again with Jackís blood flying again then Jack starts laughing and jumps on Bobby and shakes out all the blood on him. Then attacks him till Bobby goes limp. Jack gets up)
Jack: Get him to a hospital (gets Ale and takes her to his room)
Ale: I really should go check on Bobby.Jack: Shh. (he soothes) He'll be fine. I saw you out there watching and i realize that we share a dark secret Ale.Ale: What are you talking about?Jack: You crave violence and blood. You donít have to deny it.Ale: I donít know what you're talking about.Jack: You're telling me that you donít get off every time someone hits you or you see someone get hit. And that you donít love the smell of blood. (He leans towards her with blood dripping everywhere)Ale: (swallows) No uhh I donít.Jack: (leans in closer and whispers seductively) Are you sure?Ale: No. (She gasps as Jack grabs her and kisses her with his bloodstained mouth and picks her up and slams her into the wall, she kisses back and they were quiet for the longest time and then they fell asleep in each otherís arms.
Scene change: Jack visits bobby at the hospital
Bobby: (looks up and sees Jack) Get the hell out of my room.
Jack: Aww now donít be like that. I just came by to say Iím sorry for being so hard on you your first night. But it was somewhat your fault I mean I just accepted the challenge.
Bobby: You honestly think I care about the fight. Itís about you messing around with my little sister. What the hell have you done to her?
Jack: I havenít done anything to her. She chooses everything she does. In fact you might be interested to know your sister is well ummÖ
Bobby: (furiously) Shut Up!!! You donít know anything about my sister. For Chris sake. I swear if I find out that you touched her or hurt her I will report you to the police. I mean I would kill you but I want you to suffer for a long time. What do you want with her anyway?
Jack I think you should know me and her we share something that most people would find appalling, and you probably will think Iím crazy.
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 11:06 pm

now i feel bad because im the only one without writing skills... Crying or Very sad
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 11:52 pm

its not hard just write about something you know and its even easier if you read a lot and heres some more

Bobby: Itís a little late for that. And what could you to possibly have in common?
Jack: Well I was never absolutely positive until I saw her looking at us last night. She wasnít looking with worry, but a desire for the blood.
Bobby: What the hell are you talking about?
Jack: She thirsts for blood. She loves the smell, the taste; she craves it just like me. Violence gets her off maÖ
Bobby: SHUT UP!!! Youíre crazy. I canít believe you pulled my sister in your twisted little world. My sister is not like that at all. Stay away from her or I swear Iíll call the police and have you put away for a long time.
Jack: (approaching Bobbyís bed) Oh I wouldnít do that if I were you. Because you see there only about five police there that arenít working for me, and plus I wouldnít want to kill you (starts twisting Bobbyís arm Bobby screams) because believe it or not Ale does care about you. So donít make me upset her. (Twists harder) OK?
Bobby: (grimacing) no I wonít just let you screw with my sister.
Jack: Iím sorry what was that I couldnít hear you. (Twists till you can feel his arm crack)
Bobby: Alright I wonít involve the police but I will make sure you stay away from my sister. And if that means having to kill you then so be it. (Sighing as jack loosens his grip)
Nurse: (nurse walks in speaking sternly) What in the world is going on in here?
Jack: Nothing mam I was just making sure my good friend here was ok. (Looking back at Bobby) See you around Bobby. Iíll tell Ale you said hey. (Turns around to leave)
Scene Change: Hospital room, Bobbyís asleep as Ale walks in the room.
Ale: Bobby you awake?
Bobby: What happened to you last night?
Ale: Yea. Iím sorry I left I wanted to go with you but Jack said you would be fine and he was hurt to so I just to help Jack. I mean he was drenched in blood. (Blood said lustfully)
Bobby: Yea He came by.
Ale: Yea I knew he would like you. And didnít I tell you he was a good guy. I mean there was no hard feelings right. It was just a wholesome fight, and you challenged him.
Bobby: He threatened to kill me Ale if I said anything to the police.
Ale: What are you talking about? Jack wouldnít say that. I think youíve been taking to much of those pain killers that got you on here.
Bobby: No Ale listen itís not the medicine. I donít want you around him anymore. Heís dangerous. And heís changing you to.
Ale: He is not. Iím not hearing this Bobby. I like him ok. I like him a lot and I would appreciate it if you would just let me be happy for just this once. I donít need you to protect me anymore. Ok just leave me alone Bobby Please. Just stay out of it. Please.
Bobby: I want you to be happy. Itís just that I donít trust this guy Ale. He shook his own blood all over me and laughed the whole time. Then he just jumped on me. The guyís crazy Ale. And I wonít let you see him anymore. Iíll call the police itís illegal for you to see him heís over 21 and youíre not 18 yet.
Ale: Iím leaving and if I find out you called the cops I will never speak to you again do you understand me Bobby. Good. Donít even bother talking to me. (Gets up to leave)
Bobby: Ale! Ale! Get the hell back here! Ale!
Ale: (walks down the hall, goes down the elevator, then exits the building, gets in her car infuriated)
Scene Change: Ale is on the phone trying to get a hold of Jack while stuck in traffic on her way back to the house.
Ale: (Dialing the phone) God where are you Jack!?
Ale: (phone ringing) Pick up the goshdamn phone. Pick it up. Damn-
Jack: (drunk answers the phone) Hullo? Ale?
Ale: Jack (answers immediately) Where are you? We need to talk.
Jack: Iím at Joeís come on down sweetheart.
Ale: Iíll be there in a minute. (Then she runs a stoplight)
Scene change: Joeís Bar Ale pulls up and gets out of the car, and starts in the bar.
Ale: (spotting Jack on his usual stool in the back. And walks over) Jack!
Jack: Hey baby! (Drunk)
Ale: Jack we really need to talk! Jack!
Jack: Talk away sweetheart.
Ale: Alone if you donít mind honey. (Sarcastically while pulling Jack from the bar)
Jack: Iím coming. Just let me get my driÖ (Drops his class) Oops just put it on my tab Joe. (Says this while laughing)
Jack: (after getting in the car) Hey Baby. (Starts kissing Ale)
Ale: (kisses back then pulls away) Jack I really do want to talk to you for just a sec ok? Ok.
Jack: (leans back) ok. What about?
Ale: Did you go see Bobby today? Because he says you did. And he says you threatened him? And now he doesnít want me to see you.
Jack: Hold on. Ok yes I saw him (dumbfounded) At least I think I did. And no honey I didnít threaten him. Alright now that thatís settled. (Leans in to kiss her again)
Ale: (kisses him back but then pulls back again) Ok I believe you but what about him not wanting me to see you. I mean I donít like doing stuff against my brother Jack.
Jack: I donít know why but your brother doesnít like me, and he canít control you, I canít control you, only you can control you. I mean no oneís making you stay. You came on your own free will. Ok now lets try this again. (Kisses her again)
Ale: (Finally stops talking and kisses him back)
Scene change: Bobby at Joe's bar talking to Ace
Bobby: So what do you know about Jack Williams
Ace: What do you want to know?
Jack: Everything you know about him. (Firmly)
Ace: Well let's see he doesn't have any parents. Well take that back his dad's in jail. Uhh... he's been arrested three times in the last five years. He's almost always impossible to find and is really good at persuading people to do what he wants. I mean he's one hell of a spokes person.
Bobby: Anything else?
Ace: Yea he was married about two years ago.
Bobby: What? Where are they now?
Ace: They were murdered. 'Bout killed pour Jack. Especially seeing as how they never found there murderer.
Bobby: Oh my God (gets up to leave)
Scene Change: Night time on the town bridge fifty feet above the water. Drinking coffee
Jack: Hey Iíve never asked where you got your accent.
Ale: (staring out at the water) Well letís see I lived in London until I was 14, and then my foster father moved me down here; and then when he was shot Esther took me in and thatís how Bobby became my brother
Ale: what about you have you always lived here? (Pauses and takes a pill)
Jack: For as long as I can remember I have, but then again I had some pretty brutal beatings so my head might not remember right. And what are those things youíre always taking?
Ale: Just daily vitamins. And I know how that goes Iíve had it pretty rough before I got to Esther. Constant beating I think thatís why I love violence because itís all Iíve ever known
Jack: Same here (knowingly still looking at the cup where she just took her pills) Parents suck did you ever know your real ones?
Ale: yea for a little while anyways I had a picture perfect family. You see my mom left when I was four. Then my dad left when I was 6 leaving me with his prostitute wife. And she passed me around on all of her clients until she got shot by one of them. Then all of my foster parents did the same you know hit me and all that shit. Then I came here my foster father was shot thatís when Esther took me in she was the only woman who ever bothered to care. Then she got killed a year ago at a convient store hold up so Bobby's my guardian now. How about you?
Jack: mine was just as good. My mom was killed by my dad when I was five but the court never convicted him. So I was stuck with him. And he would come home drunk and knock me around till my white carpet was dyed red with my blood. He even put me on top of the stove once when it was on. Constantly telling me I had to go to college because he didnít. He'd come home drunk with all his girlfriends and beat me up while they laughed. I was a punching bag for him and all his friends and I would go a month at times without food or a bath or any of that kind of stuff. We constantly switched apartments because he couldnít pay the rent everyone worse than the one before. So yea I had a picture perfect family to.
Ale: Man we was beat when we was born. So I wonder why we love fights and violence so much after everything we've been through
Jack: (taking a swallow of his beer) now that I don't know all I can guess is thatís when our parents tried to kill us over and over. We decided that instead of realizing that it hurt we made it feel good we turned into pleasure until the point where we craved and it became our ultimate high. I mean because violence is the ultimate high.
Ale: So basically we're psychotic yea I think that pretty much sums it up.
Jack: We're not psychotic we just know that someday we're gonna die and instead of being afraid of that fact we take every chance that we can get to make our lives that much better. In the words of Tyler Durden from Fight Club, ďItís only after weíve lost everything, that weíre free to do anything.Ē I mean we could try and go through life and say we're going to be famous. We'll be known world wide, people will want to be us, but it will never happen and itís about damn time we realize that we're society's unwanted children and we're fine with that. We realize that we were dealt the bad hand since the day the doctor smacked us on our asses when we entered this world. Thatís why we live everyday making it as pleasant as possible. But not anymore because we're going to do what we want and push everyone out of our way we're going to be free from all that consumerism and high society. We're going to take the fact that we're society's unwanted children and use it to our advantage.
Ale: (staring at Jack with awe) I knew there was a reason I stayed.
Jack: The only question now is what are we going to do with this new found realization?
Ale: I don't think it matters itís our world now right. I mean the world as we knew it is now our domain.
Jack: Thatís exactly right. And now we just need to let the world know that weíre not following the rules anymore. I mean letís face it every rule out there has been made by some rich guy who thinks heís perfect I say we need to stop trying to be so damn perfect and let things happen as they happen. We need to learn to let go. So what do you say letís let go.
Ale: What? (Says this as Jack lifts her on top of the railing of the bridge.
Jack: (holds her, and looks down.) Are you ready?
Ale: (Looking down) No but letís do it. (And they let go and fall fifty feet into the water screaming)
Ale: That is the most amazing thing I have ever done.
Jack: That was so awesome. (They both look up at the bridge and sees people looking down and pointing)
Jack: I think weíve just started a whole new revolution. (Looks at Ale and they both start laughing)
Scene Change: Bobby is on his way home after leaving the hospital. He is on the phone with his friend Josh who knows everyone and where to find them in town.
Bobby: (Josh picks up the phone) Josh Hey I need you to do me a favor man
Josh: What do you need me to do?
Bobby: Do you know a guy by the name Jack Williams?
Josh: Yea man. That guy is crazy man. He owns that place where you can goÖ
Bobby: Yea yea I know fight for the fun of it., so you know him then
Josh: Of course I know him. What do you want from him?
Bobby: Where can I find him?
Josh: I donít know if I should tell you he made it pretty clear he doesnít like to be found. Unless you got good reason. (Probing him for answers)
Bobby: Heís got my little sister. Now where can I find him?
Josh: So that was AleÖ
Bobby: Wait what do you mean that was Ale?
Josh: Well Big Todd told me he saw Jack and Ale jump off of the old bridge. Apparently they wanted to experience the rush. I never knew your sister was such a dare-devil.
Bobby: She wasnít that Jack has got her thinking all these things that just doesnít make any sense; stuff like the world looks done on us and we were dealt a bad card in life, and weíre low-lives.
Josh: Damn man I didnít realize that. Sure Iíll tell you weíre heís at man.
Bobby: Thanks man
Josh: Alright man heís at his house right now just go to 1966 Ashland Stokes Bridge Rd. Heís there with Robbie and your little sister.
Bobby: Thanks man I owe you one.
Josh: No problem man and tell your sister I said hey.
Bobby: Alright man. Check you later.
Scene change: Jackís house. Mid-day, with Jack, Robbie, and Ale, while eating.
Peter: Hey guys check it out (starts reading from newspaper) ďTwo people were seen jumping off the old Jameson Bridge last night at around 1:00 a.m. in the morning. They were seen talking on the side when they got up on the railing and jumped down fifty feet below. Although no one talked to them afterwards they were seen bobbing back up in the water and laughing. What has our youth come to that would make them want to jump off of bridges? What dare I ask is next?Ē Wow I wonder who it was. (Pondering the thought)
Ale: (looks at Jack and they smile) I donít know probably just a couple of punks drunk.
Peter: (Looks from Ale to Jack) wait you mean it was you two. How come I wasnít in on it? (Accusingly)
Jack: it was a spur of the moment thing.
Peter: Yeah right
Ale: No it was really
Jack: Seriously man am I the kind of guy who plans anything out?
Peter: I wouldnít say that
Jack: Well listen to this I was thinking that (stops as car drives up)
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Tue Apr 17, 2007 11:53 pm

Peter: Where you expecting somebody?
Jack: No
Ale: Oh my God
Jack: What?
Ale: Thatís Bobbyís car
Jack: (walking out on the porch) Can I help you with something there Bobby?
Bobby: Cut the crap. Whereís Ale?!?
Jack: You know I donít know butÖ
Bobby: Ale!!! Get you ass out here right now!!!
Jack: Now hold on right there sheíll come out f she wants to but if she doesnít want to talk to you than your not gonna to make her. (Gets up in Bobbyís face)
Bobby: Iím leaving here with my sister whether you like it or not. (Gets right back up in Jackís face)
Ale: (they both turn when Ale walks outside) What do you want Bobby?
Bobby: I want you to come home right now. (Firmly)
Ale: Well thatís not going to happen. I like it right where I am. (Goes and stands beside Jack)
Jack: Well if thatís all you wanted I guess youíll be on your way. (Puts his arm around Ale)
Bobby: Iíll leave as soon as my sister gets her ass in the car. (Looks at Ale) Ale get in the damn car. Weíre leaving.
Bobby: You know what fine. I'll go but, can I please just have one second with you please Ale?
Jack: Listen she said she didn't want to talk so why...
Ale: It's ok Jack.
Bobby: Thank you. (Looks at Jack) Alone if you don't mind.
Jack: Now ho...
Ale: Jack just give us a minute ok? (Looks at Jack pleadingly)
Jack: Alright I'll be right inside if you need anything ok?
Ale: Alright. (Looks back at Bobby) Ok what do you have to say?
Bobby: I'm sorry if you think that it's you that I don't trust because it's not. Ok?
Ale: I know that.
Bobby: It's him I don't like.
Ale: What donít you like about him Bobby? I mean do you even have one good reason for me to go with you other than the fact that you donít like him.
Bobby: Where to freaking start? Heís been in jail three times in the last freaking five years Ale! He has a talent of getting people to do what he wants; and he was married two years ago but then they were just murdered while he was off in England. Heís not good for you, or your health. (Last 3 parts muttered)
Ale: You have no right to talk about my health, and beside Iím taking care of that. And just so you know I know heís been arrested before and in case you forgot youíve been to jail a couple time to. And where in hellfire did you here that he was married.
Bobby: Ace told me it happened two years ago His wifeís name was Rebecca and he had a little girl to. Her name was Jasmine.
Ale: Stop it! I finally have something good in my life please don't ruin it for me. (In tears)
Bobby: Do you honestly think this is going to last Ale? Wake up! Nothing good ever lasts especially not for people like us. (Tries to go to Ale)
Ale: (pushes him away) Stay away from me! Get the hell out of here. (Bobby tries to go to her again) Don't touch me. I said get out.
Bobby: 9pauses then turns to leave) I love you Ale. Youíre my sister and I love you. I just want you to that.
Ale: (on her knees sobbing) please get out. (Says between breaths)
Bobby: (gets in car and leaves)
Ale: (turns around and sees Jack waiting in the house and mouths to him...) Goodbye (and turns and runs)
Jack: (bolts out of the door and screams) Ale! Ale don't do this! Ale! (Runs after her as she runs onto a crowded sidewalk)
Scene change: Jack running after Ale on the sidewalk
Jack: (running into people shouting Ale's name while people curse at him as he runs into them) Ale!!! (Over and over)
Bystander: (gets in front of Jack Hey man do you have some money?
Jack: Move I have to get by (trying to push his way through)
Bystander: come on man just a couple of dollars.
Jack: (reaches in his pocket and throws $50 at the man) there! (Continues to scream for Ale) Ale!! (Looks around and realizes heís lost her to the crowd)
Scene change: Ale enters a Bed and Breakfast and starts talking to the owner
Mrs. Miller/owner: Well hello there can I help you with something? (Says this as Ale enters in back first cheerily)
Ale: (turns around) Yes Iíd like to rent a room for a couple of nights please
Mrs. Miller: Are you alright honey? You're not in any trouble are you?
Ale: No mam so how much are the rooms?
Mrs. Miller: $30 a night
Ale: Alright Iíll be here probably three nights (hands her the money)
Mrs. Miller: Well alright then letís get you settled in (looks around for Ale's bags)
Well child where are your bags?
Ale: I don't have any
Mrs. Miller: Well I say I ain't never had someone come in with no bags, but alright how about some food then?
Ale: (looks out the window one more time) Alright.
Scene change: Jack walks back into the house.
Peter: What happened? Why was Ale at the Millerís Bed and Breakfast?
Jack: What? (Demanding)
Peter: I saw Ale go in that bed and breakfast place you know right near the park.
Jack: (runs out of the house. Goes to get in his car)
Peter: Hey where are you going? (Screams)
Jack: (doesnít even look back as he drives off)
Scene Change: Back at the bed and breakfast Ale is eating dinner with Mrs. Miller
Mrs. Miller: Are you sure youíre alright sweetie? (Says this as she gives Ale her dinner and sits down at the other end of the table)
Ale: Yes thank you. (Says as she eats a bite of macaroni and cheese)
Mrs. Miller: Ok. So what brings you here to my little inn? Do you live far away?
Ale: Umm itís just our house is kind of full right now. So I was just going to crash somewhere else for a few days. Thatís all.
Mrs. Miller: So you live here?
Ale: Yes mam (still looking over her shoulder)
Mrs. Miller: I swear if I had a dollar for every time you looked out that window.
Ale: Iím sorry (smiles apologetically)
Mrs. Miller: Itís alright. So how is the roast beef?
Ale: Itís gre- (someone comes in the door)
Mrs. Miller: Excuse me dear.
Ale: Sure (trying to see who it is) cool it (mutters to herself then hears Mrs. Miller say across the room)
Mrs. Miller: How can I help you (says to the man at the door)
Man: Yeah umm Iím actually looking for somebody. Is there a umm Ale Mone here?
Ale: Oh My God! (And falls out of chair) shit. (Gets up to go out the back)
Jack/man: Ale (sees Ale in the back and pushes Mrs. Miller and starts running after her)
Ale: (runs out the back door)
Jack: Ale! (Runs after her and screams)
Ale: (keeps running)
Jack: (mutters to himself) darn sheís fast (then screams yet again) Ale! Come on. Give me a chance to explain! Ale! (Speeds up) Ale! (Catches up to her and grabs her making them both fall to the ground)
Ale: (they both get up and she turns and starts hitting him) Why didnít you tell me? I trusted you! My whole life has been filled with nothing but people lying to me! (Stops and falls on the ground and sobs)
Jack: (kneels down beside Ale) Hey its ok. I love you Ale when will you understand that?
Ale: (After long pause) I do I mean I do understand. (Another long pause then whispers) I love you to.
Jack: (leans in and kisses Ale then hugs her. Then starts laughing. Looks up at Ale still laughing)
Ale: (laughs to they both start laughing right in the rain)
Scene change: Ale and Jack are in the car on the way home the car is silent
Ale: You didnít have to hide it from me you know it wouldnít have changed anything you know. But why were you arrested the last time? I know all the other times but you never told me about what happened that last time.
Jack: (thinks for a second) When my family was killed, it nearly killed me, and I didnít tell you because I was afraid of what you might think; and it was just so much easier that way.
Ale: I know how you feel on that one I tried to kill myself when my mom Esther was killed.
Jack: Well hold on a sec thatís not all. When the detective told me at his office that they were closing the case without convicting anybody I blew up. I threw things around like chairs and papers and shoved the desk. Then this other cop came in and tried to restrain me, and thatís when I got my first taste of violence, because you see I had never been in a fight since my father and all of a sudden right then and there I blew it. I tried to kill him all that anger that I had been holding in I let it all out right on him. It took five guys to hold me back. The guy was in a coma for 10 months. So I served two years. And the bad thing was I never got to tell the man I was sorry. Not once. I felt bad about hurting him because it made me realize how much I was like my father, and that terrified me. Thatís why I never fight somebody unless they agree.
Ale: Have you ever tried to find that cop I mean so you could tell him how you felt?
Jack: Yes, I even went to his house once. His name was Kevin James I saw him there in a wheelchair with his wife and child. I just couldnít bring myself to do it.
Ale: Would you ever try and talk to him if you had the chance to you know if he was alone?
Jack: Donít even think about Ale. Iím not even supposed to see him. My probation officer wonít let me.
Ale: Youíre on probation do you realize that half the stuff you do could put you back in prison. Gosh, Jack you are so infuriating!!!
Jack: (laughing) Will you just relax. Iím smarter than you take me for.
Ale: (mutters) humph. Letís see how you feel when youíre back in jail.
Jack: Iím sorry what was that? (Still laughing)
Ale: (as Jack tarts car again) We really do have to start telling the truth more often so that we can avoid moments like this. Because I donít know about you but I donít want this to happen again.
Jack: Amen to that. (Looks at Ale) So what are we going to do about your brother?
Ale: Life just refuses to be easy.
Jack: Not meaning to reference Fight Club, but in the words of Tyler Durden, ďWithout pain, without sacrifice, we would have nothing.Ē
Ale: You know one of these days youíre going to have to stop referring to Tyler Durden no matter how smart his remarks are.
Jack: How dare you put down Fight Club that has got to be the best movie that man ever created, best book to. There hasnít been one decent movie since either.
Ale: What am I going to do with you? (Kisses Jack while heís driving then pulls back)
Jack: Now back to the subject of your brother.
Ale: Can we not talk about him till we get home please?
Jack: (then pulls into the house driveway) Oh look here we are (sarcastically)
Ale: Shut up. (Then stops as Robbie comes out looking very distressed)
Peter: Where have you two been?
Jack: Are you ok man?
Peter: (Looks at Ale) Ale I donít know how to say this? (Stares at him)
Peter: Itís your brother
Ale: What about my brother?
Peter: Well the police came by and asked for you and I said you werenít here, Then I asked what they wanted with you and then they asked if I was family. I lied and said yes. Then they told me that, he was killed in a car accident. He was driving out near the interstate and apparently he wasnít paying attention and went on the wrong side of the road, and well there was an 18 wheeler, well you know how it goes from there. (pauses) Iím so sorry Ale
Ale: (Standing still the whole time looked up with a glaze in her eyes then looks at Jack)
Scene Change: Bobbyís grave right after funeral. Jack, Ale, and Peter.
Jack: wow this place is really creepy. (Trying to lighten the mood)
Ale: Itís a cemetery. What do you expect?
Jack: creepiness (sullenly)
Peter: Wow Iím really bored (Jack smacks Peter across the head)
Jack: Damn it Peter you are so stupid.
Ale: (starts laughing)
Jack: (starts laughing to)
Peter: What I missed it? What is so funny? (Then starts laughing to)
Ale: (looks up and saysÖ) You know what Peter Iím bored to. Letís go do something.
Jack: Whatíd you have in mind?
Ale: Iím sure we can think of something to piss the world off.
Jack: Letís go.
To be continuedÖ..
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 18, 2007 12:06 am

Im sorry but i couldnt read it all, it was really good the bits i read though, i wouldnt be able to write a script, just a book. But if i publish my book and every one loves it, then they make a movie ( that goes BY the book!) and then i will write the second and third book and become even more rich and famous than JK rowling and claim world domination. * ah hem* sorry bout that, DOES ANYONE KNOW HOW TO DRAW GOOD? I will give you full credit for your drawings in my book.
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 18, 2007 12:25 am

nope sorry i suck at drawing No ive been looking for someone to draw the cover of my book for about a month now
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 18, 2007 1:51 am

hey phenoix I'm sortof a compulsive artist, whats your email i can try to draw you something. your book looks like its going to be great and i will buy a dozen copies when its finished just for you then forcefully make my friends read it then you can control the world with your writing genius!!!


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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 18, 2007 2:23 am

oh and by the way i want more!...like immeadiatly or sooner!
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Wed Apr 18, 2007 11:36 pm

HEY,what about me, i need some illistrations too. PLEEEEEASE! And world domination was my idea too. is my writing invisable so no one even knows i exist, Sad ah hahahaha no way dude:lol!:
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PostSubject: Re: Author?   Thu Apr 19, 2007 7:17 pm

i can try do draw you some stuff hair colors eye colors?
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